Saturday's attempt, day 4

The Barnacle Says

I am a lunar crater on a gray whaleโ€™s back,
a lightening bolt on the Bering Sea.
I am hailstorms stinging Pacific swells,
baby fog drifting on hidden lagoons.

I am feathers that tickle el Niรฑo,
a calm morning before the storm,
the wing of a dove as it lands on a branch,
a curl of smoke from distant lands.

I am the silent breath of a slow ride,
the chill in the air, an alpine moon,
a shiny nickel found on the sand.
I am antique paper rolled in a bottle,

faded letters scratched in blood.
I am the tip of a whittled stick,
the thoughts that drift out to sea
and return with the incoming tide.

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Day 4. I wrote this poem using a few words for colors found on paint chip samples, the idea for my prompt currently up at Read Write Poem. I’ve used this idea before with some amusing results. Sometimes the names for colors on those paint samples are beyond the pale… . I also wrote about an animal for Poetic Asides. dyalns-letter-a


Responses

  1. Dick Avatar
    Dick

    The prompt fired off just the right spark, Christine. This sings along really well.

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  2. Linda Jacobs Avatar
    Linda Jacobs

    I kept wondering how you were going to end this…perfection! Everything is beautiful!

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  3. Liz Avatar
    Liz

    I love poems about odd creatures. The image – “lunar crater on a gray whale’s back” – is wonderful.

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  4. Erin Davis Avatar
    Erin Davis

    I love all the images that you unfold in each stanza. This is great!

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  5. carolee Avatar
    carolee

    considering color first sets this one in a great context — i picture a single color in many permutations/manifestations and i like watching it move.

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  6. christine Avatar
    christine

    Carolee, you’re so smart! That’s exactly what I did, ๐Ÿ™‚

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  7. Catherine Avatar
    Catherine

    What an amazing list of grey images. It would be really interesting to leave the title of this poem and see what it conjures up

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  8. jo Avatar
    jo

    Lovely. Yes the movement works brilliantly.

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  9. Michelle Avatar
    Michelle

    Love this. Brava, my friend.

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  10. blythe Avatar
    blythe

    Gray just might be my favorite color, odd as that sounds, so I loved this. This *is* why I loveAlso, your ability to combine prompts amazes me. It’s like flawless poetry acrobatics.

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  11. christine Avatar
    christine

    Catherine, I think I’ll change the title of this poem to “Shades of Gray.” I was already thinking that when I posted it, but I got myself sidetracked with the prompt at Poetic Asides. Ugh!

    Thanks everyone, for your kind words.

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  12. Julie Avatar
    Julie

    I love it! This stanza is my favorite:

    “I am the silent breath of a slow ride,
    the chill in the air, an alpine moon,
    a shiny nickel found on the sand.
    I am antique paper rolled in a bottle,”

    Thanks for explaining where/how you created the poem. The poetic process is so interesting to me. I love your prompts!

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